The Rejected Alpha's Daughter Comments
Clare Hodgson
Right!!! I have managed to get to chapter 20 and I am tapping out!!! I think it could have the potential to be a really good book... Strong female lead, clear start, however I feel it looses so much depth and detail early on in the book... Lots and Lots of descriptive paragraphs which is al very well but they are not the easiest of reads... it has a tendency to loose the readers as not very clear and it gets a little boring and long... not enough dialogue and interaction between charactors...build on the relationships between rather than dropping this randomly into chapters about such as building desire between the two leads.
03/23/2025 21:45mama11945
If I could give this a negative star I would. If I wanted to take a course in how to lose readers this story is a prime example. It had a great start but then the strong alpha female turns into a sex deviant omega. Not only is there a major character change but the writing style has also become overly effusive. I felt like I was trying to read Chaucer again. yuk.
03/06/2025 23:13Bonblue75
my 2 cents: great beginning storyline & characters- although bloody/violent. I was in to it until ch 40- had to stop. Sorry to say all this but too wordy & hard to follow. I'm sure the author was trying to set the scene they wanted to portray but it was just too overwhelming. The writing style takes a astronomical trajectory turn off & morphs into a whole other surreal situation. It feels like an unfinished work that somebody else took over & finished with their own twist. Scrolled through the other 86 is mostly descriptions/explanations & no dialogue- it jumped around so much, I couldn't attempt it. I thought this was a fated mates romance tale? So lost
03/01/2025 08:17
Visitor
I think I am fairly well versed in the English language.... but I am really struggling. The first few chapters felt rushed and missed components to set the story. It was hard to picture a scene as it jumped too quickly. But now, each chapter is way too hard to follow. I'm more concerned with trying to understand what I am reading, then actually just reading.
02/26/2025 07:59Visitor
Every other word has 4 syllables. Why am I taking an English class to get through each chapter of the book. It makes reading this so unpleasant
02/14/2025 08:15Visitor
Started out great, then went down hill. They have a great strong female character that they turn into a weak sex doll basically I couldn't even get through it. 1/5 Stars
02/11/2025 08:35Visitor
Think the author bought a thesaurus. Writing style has changed and full of literary language that is so different from the beginning. I like the hard ass alpha trained woman, not this , now omega's, inner monologue of flowery drivel. I keep scan reading as I'm getting bored.
02/09/2025 14:01Visitor
Damn the writer effed up their own book. Had a fantastic story line going but ruined it. Should've kept her stubborn. Yes in this werewolf genre sex I'd something unavoidable for them but damn at least you could've left her dignity and kept their sex heated during or perhaps in the heat of the moment. But to have her submit weakly. Yea you crashed your own book.
02/07/2025 08:24Visitor
Please don't tell me she went from badass wolf to weak and throwing herself on any bed near by to submit. This book would have sooooooo much more potential with her and the alpha clashing and trying each others will for will. He clearly needs a Lina that can match his stubbornness. I will quit reading as I can't take another weak wolf character.
02/07/2025 08:09Angela Waring
I am not 100% sure what happened here. the story started strong but things rapidly changed like it was being written by 2 different people. The FMC went from strong being trained to be the Alpha of her pack to a weak Omega. Plus the writing style changed drastically. The words, tone and even conversations went from normal 20 year olds speaking and telling the story to needing a thesaurus and a PhD to understand the words being used.
08/16/2024 21:30
