Conquered by the Moretti Twins. Comments

  • Michelle White

    I don't understand what's going on with this second story. is this the Alex from the first book when he was young? this is confusing. is it a prequel to The First book? it makes no sense to me.

    11/08/2024 04:20

  • Amanda Franjic

    The idea itself is nice, although I gotta admit I am a little torn whether I like the story or not... It is not because of your lack of knowledge regarding the language, but mostly due to you seemingly just being confused most of the time. More than anything you seem really confused about your own characters. You keep on misgendering them, especially Luan, the amount of times you depicted him as a female is astonishing. Also your kept on changing your mind about who Enzo's actual brother is, sometimes it's Alex, sometimes the other one, even though it is not always clear from the words, but in the context of the setting, it is. Also, you also kept on switching POV's, even though a chapter was written in a certain character's POV, which you clearly displayed each time, you kept on suddenly writing from another's perspective. Lastly, which could be attributed to your level of understanding of the English language, you kept on switching between tenses.

    10/19/2024 01:03