Bound by Destiny with the Egyptian God Comments
Megan Vander Pluym
I wish there had been more research done. I know that's not the purpose, but a little more research would go a long way to make this story better.
08/11/2023 10:56Hali Denenberg
The story has a lot of potential. I highly suggest using a spelling/grammar checker or enlisting a beta reader to help catch errors. You have several instances where you decided to change a word, but the original word remained and both words were joined together. Too many errors makes it hard to read.
08/09/2023 03:56Reader-998117
Sounds very original& exciting, I can't wait to read this one.
08/09/2023 00:08