***A Remastered Version of Werewolf's Heartsong.***

Alora, has been hated by her family since birth. Her Families favorite pastime is torturing her. 

After turning eighteen she's rejected by her mate, who turns out to be her older sisters boyfriend. 

Breaking the chains that bound her powers, Alora is freed from the family that hates her, and is given a new family. 

When an old friend and protecter of her's returns home to tak his place as next Alpha of Alpha's, Alora's life is once more changed for the better as he says the fated word. "Mate."

The Song in the Alpha's Heart

Really love this new direction! Though, hope you don't take this badly, but you repeat the same words too close together. Maybe use other names or descriptors for things. 

Example: you say the full name of the pack and mansion each time and state the same things for 3 sentences in a row. Maybe change to "our packs gathering area" or just mansion. Stuff like that. 

Not the best examples...but I hope I'm not being rude by saying this! I do love the original a huge amount, but even reading in my head it gets too wordy and I end up changing the words as I think them. Rather it be so good that it isn't necessary! Because the story makes me so happy to read it! 

Danielle

Sitsume

I dont think so u rude. I wrote same for some other book as suggestion where they also changed their style of writing from POV to 3rd person. They took it well. I think it takes time to adjust to. Shame it had to happen due ppl not respecting authors rights.

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